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纠正英语作文I spent time in the beautiful country in my summer wac

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纠正英语作文
I spent time in the beautiful country in my summer wacation.I went hiking with my friends ,we were went bike riding ,through it was very danger,we had a good time.And then we were went swimming ,went fishing and so on.The most interesting thing is went sightseeing and visited the aquarium.This is my most happy summer vacation
第一句有重复.帮你改了如下.
I spent my summer wacation in the beautiful country .I went hiking with my friends by bikes.Although it was very dangerous,we had a good time.In the meanwhile ,we went swimming and fishing.The most interesting thing is that i went sightseeing and visited the aquarium.This is my happiest summer vacation!
恕我直言你这个语病和用词错的有点多,帮你改好了,纯手打.
再问: 谢谢!不过我觉得我英语不差,平时都有90几分,我9月份上初三了,可是我觉得我写英语作文总是中国式的,,作文10分满分总只拿得到7.5或8分,这个要怎么纠正这个毛病呢?
再答: 我觉得可能有点地方你错的太过于明显,然后老师给分就低了,比如 it was very danger。后面改用形容词的或者用of+名词做形容词be of danger。 写作时候要避免句子重复,改用一些较为复杂的句子,别用零散的句子。 你以后可以把你写的发给我我帮你改。 望采纳谢谢。