作业帮点评一下这篇英语作文,是要参赛的.最好提些修改建议.
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点评一下这篇英语作文,是要参赛的.最好提些修改建议.
My family life
Everyone has a warm family,including me.My family is full of fun and happiness.I love my family very much.
My dad is always strict with me on my lessons.At weekend,he often lets me do more exercise after I have finished the homework.And he often helps me work out the difficult problems.With his help,I usually study well at school.Though I lose plenty of time to play,I feel very meaningful.So I am grateful to my dad and I never get angry with my parents.I regard my parents as my friends.
My mum is a housewife.She is kind to me and she is seldom angry with me.For example,when I am doing my homework for a long time at night,my mum will come to my room carefully with a cup of coffee.The coffee can warm me up.More importantly,I feel warm at that time.
My parents always encourage and support me.So I often do some housework without any help to be grateful to them.Such as wash ing dishes and washing some clothes.
In short,my family is peace and makes me feel comfortable.And my parents teach me a lot.They are my teachers also friends.
I enjoy my family life.
My family life
Everyone has a warm family,including me.My family is full of fun and happiness.I love my family very much.
My dad is always strict with me on my lessons.At weekend,he often lets me do more exercise after I have finished the homework.And he often helps me work out the difficult problems.With his help,I usually study well at school.Though I lose plenty of time to play,I feel very meaningful.So I am grateful to my dad and I never get angry with my parents.I regard my parents as my friends.
My mum is a housewife.She is kind to me and she is seldom angry with me.For example,when I am doing my homework for a long time at night,my mum will come to my room carefully with a cup of coffee.The coffee can warm me up.More importantly,I feel warm at that time.
My parents always encourage and support me.So I often do some housework without any help to be grateful to them.Such as wash ing dishes and washing some clothes.
In short,my family is peace and makes me feel comfortable.And my parents teach me a lot.They are my teachers also friends.
I enjoy my family life.
我直接给你打改过的句子啦!供你参考
这里你在前面用了often.所以要用一般时.切记哦.还有 finish+doing是固定搭配.可现实你的英语水平.
.把and 和前一句连上变成At weekend,he often lets me do more exercise after I finish doing my homework and he often helps me work out the difficult problems.
这两句士一个意思
my mum will come to my room carefully with a cup of coffee把carefully放于句尾.副词修饰动词.修饰的是come 但是是近来带着咖啡不是进来小心带着咖啡.
最后一段直接给你改了啊.
In short,my family is peace and makes me feel comfortable and my parents teach me a lot.They are my teachers as well my friends.
祝你成功哦..
这里你在前面用了often.所以要用一般时.切记哦.还有 finish+doing是固定搭配.可现实你的英语水平.
.把and 和前一句连上变成At weekend,he often lets me do more exercise after I finish doing my homework and he often helps me work out the difficult problems.
这两句士一个意思
my mum will come to my room carefully with a cup of coffee把carefully放于句尾.副词修饰动词.修饰的是come 但是是近来带着咖啡不是进来小心带着咖啡.
最后一段直接给你改了啊.
In short,my family is peace and makes me feel comfortable and my parents teach me a lot.They are my teachers as well my friends.
祝你成功哦..
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