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书面表达 假如你是李华，你校校刊“Our step”的招聘启事引起了你的兴趣，请根据下列信息用英文写一封申请信。 姓名：李华 性别：男 年龄：16 年纪：高一 兴趣：摄影 写作 户外运动 其他：活泼、开朗、精力充沛；曾获北京市摄影比赛青少年组二等奖 应聘目的：参加社会实践活动，丰富业余生活 注意:词数不少于60 可根据需要适当增加细节 Dear Harry, I am writing to apply for the photographer for Our Step.I am a schoolboy ,my name is li hua,I am a student in our school garde one.I havea lot of hobbies,such as photographer,wtiting,outdoor sports andso on.My frinends described me who is a vivid,cheerful and energyis full.And I winned the second prize of teenagers with photographer.Iwant to join this team very much,because,I think it can accumulate a wealth of experience and enrich my experience of life. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours Sincerely, Li Hua 希望老师可以帮我改正我作文里的错误，您能不帮我把一些简单的句子改成高级语法，O(∩_∩)O谢谢！
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解题过程：
I am writing to apply for the photographer for Our Step.I am a schoolboy ,my name is li hua,I am a student in our school garde one. 这句话少了连词，而且还有些重复和句意不对，但是可以改成包含更多知识点的句子。（I am a schoolboy, named Li Hua, who was in grade one）I havea lot of hobbies,such as photographer,wtiting,outdoor sports andso on.My frinends described me who is a vivid这句话语意不对，而且describe应该这样使用describe sth/ sb as/ to be ---（described me to be vivid）,cheerful and energyis full （full of energy）.And I winned（过去式的形式错误，应该用won） the second prize of teenagers with photographer.Iwant to join this team very much,because,I think it can accumulate a wealth of experience and enrich my experience（这里的意思是经历，用复数形式） of life.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
整体而言，这是一篇不错的文章。虽然有一些不足之处，但我觉得如果在考试之中，你也可以避免的。还有，我已经尽量把句子改成复杂的句子了，但是请要注意，可不是每个句子都可以转成复杂的句子的，那是由咱们想要表达的意思来决定的。希望我的解释能令你满意，祝你学习进步！
最终答案：略
解题过程：
I am writing to apply for the photographer for Our Step.I am a schoolboy ,my name is li hua,I am a student in our school garde one. 这句话少了连词，而且还有些重复和句意不对，但是可以改成包含更多知识点的句子。（I am a schoolboy, named Li Hua, who was in grade one）I havea lot of hobbies,such as photographer,wtiting,outdoor sports andso on.My frinends described me who is a vivid这句话语意不对，而且describe应该这样使用describe sth/ sb as/ to be ---（described me to be vivid）,cheerful and energyis full （full of energy）.And I winned（过去式的形式错误，应该用won） the second prize of teenagers with photographer.Iwant to join this team very much,because,I think it can accumulate a wealth of experience and enrich my experience（这里的意思是经历，用复数形式） of life.
I am looking forward to hearing from you.
整体而言，这是一篇不错的文章。虽然有一些不足之处，但我觉得如果在考试之中，你也可以避免的。还有，我已经尽量把句子改成复杂的句子了，但是请要注意，可不是每个句子都可以转成复杂的句子的，那是由咱们想要表达的意思来决定的。希望我的解释能令你满意，祝你学习进步！
最终答案：略