作业帮麻烦帮我检查一下这个短文,一分钟的,可以适当修改(无视大小写）.
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麻烦帮我检查一下这个短文,一分钟的,可以适当修改(无视大小写）.
hello,my name is ##.Today,i am so glad to come here to introduce my self to all you.i am thirteen years old.my favorite subject is geography .the teacher is an interesting man.i don not like math.the teacher a little scary.he always tell us "math is important!"i like sports,such as swimming,badminton and soon.there are three people in my family.we went for walk at sunset.这个对我很重要,请务必帮我好好修改,
hello,my name is ##.Today,i am so glad to come here to introduce my self to all you.i am thirteen years old.my favorite subject is geography .the teacher is an interesting man.i don not like math.the teacher a little scary.he always tell us "math is important!"i like sports,such as swimming,badminton and soon.there are three people in my family.we went for walk at sunset.这个对我很重要,请务必帮我好好修改,
1.all of you这个表达有问题,一定要改
2.a funny,我觉得用interesting形容人好像不怎么常用,改成funny更符合习惯
3.but i don not like math,the teacher makes me a little scared.加了but句与句之间
的转折就显得不那么生硬,接着的那个分句我建议你改一下
4.he always tells us,这句话是第三人称的问题
5.we usually go for walk at sunset.因为你们经常散步,所以没必要用过去时
再问： 能不能帮我修改一下，可以适当修改，谢谢
再答： 我已经帮你改过了啊
2.a funny,我觉得用interesting形容人好像不怎么常用,改成funny更符合习惯
3.but i don not like math,the teacher makes me a little scared.加了but句与句之间
的转折就显得不那么生硬,接着的那个分句我建议你改一下
4.he always tells us,这句话是第三人称的问题
5.we usually go for walk at sunset.因为你们经常散步,所以没必要用过去时
再问： 能不能帮我修改一下，可以适当修改，谢谢
再答： 我已经帮你改过了啊