作业帮一点感想,语病肯定很多.请高手指正,非常感谢!
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一点感想,语病肯定很多.请高手指正,非常感谢!
Falling deeply in a serious selection.
I could not resist.
What I am going after, like the summer snow .
.
Login, just to see if you are online.
Though you are, I dare not call you.
.
Bring the mobile on at anytime, only to expect the message from you.
.
Are you sleeping?
Waiting for you at the same time everyday.
.
Miss you to the next day.
From day to day.
.
How are you?
谢谢彼采。
你的修改使这段文字变流畅了，自然鲜明又富有针对性。
刚看到时还为dilemma是否可数到网上查了一下，后来验证了你的准确。
What I am going after, like the summer snow .原来like用的是as，感觉这句好象是一个词。没有现在你用的好。
Bring the cellphone with me at anytime.很到位。好象连我心里想的你都清楚。
佩服你的严谨和水准。
Falling deeply in a serious selection.
I could not resist.
What I am going after, like the summer snow .
.
Login, just to see if you are online.
Though you are, I dare not call you.
.
Bring the mobile on at anytime, only to expect the message from you.
.
Are you sleeping?
Waiting for you at the same time everyday.
.
Miss you to the next day.
From day to day.
.
How are you?
谢谢彼采。
你的修改使这段文字变流畅了，自然鲜明又富有针对性。
刚看到时还为dilemma是否可数到网上查了一下，后来验证了你的准确。
What I am going after, like the summer snow .原来like用的是as，感觉这句好象是一个词。没有现在你用的好。
Bring the cellphone with me at anytime.很到位。好象连我心里想的你都清楚。
佩服你的严谨和水准。
Falling deeply in a serious selection.
应该把 serious selection 改称 dilemma
Falling deeply in a dilemma.
I could not resist.
应该改成 I could not make the decision
What I am going after,like the summer snow .
是不是可以改成 Is what I am going after,just like the summer snow.
like 做动词是喜欢的意思,作副词才是 像 的意思.
Bring the mobile on at anytime,
Bring on 是词组,应该改成 Bring the cellphone with me at anytime,
其他应该还可以
谢谢夸奖了!祝进步!
应该把 serious selection 改称 dilemma
Falling deeply in a dilemma.
I could not resist.
应该改成 I could not make the decision
What I am going after,like the summer snow .
是不是可以改成 Is what I am going after,just like the summer snow.
like 做动词是喜欢的意思,作副词才是 像 的意思.
Bring the mobile on at anytime,
Bring on 是词组,应该改成 Bring the cellphone with me at anytime,
其他应该还可以
谢谢夸奖了!祝进步!