修改英语作文Firstly we should warmly love our nation,show respect

修改英语作文
Firstly we should warmly love our nation,show respect to our mainland and school.Then,we need a goal toward life which can remain us never to give up.
Secondly,we should live with parents peacefully,respect our teacher and get along well with our classmates.Surely,we need to learn how to get along with others,which is a social lesson everybody should learn.
Finally,as a high student,protecting the nature is our unavoidable responsibility.So we need to save energy as energy is limited.Menwhile Measures should be taken to keep animals and planets from dangers.
In my opinion,we students must study hard so that we are able to spare no effort to construct our nation and society.Only in this way can we enjoy life better
There basically two ways to write a letter.Both ways have their own advantages.
One way is to write a letter with a pen.In this way,you can convey your true feeling to others; What is more,Stamps will convey culture and history to people all over the world.
Another way is to send e-mails; it is not only convinnt but also can save stamp cost.If you have friends abroad,the message can be sent to him whenever you want.
As for me,I prefer to the latter.Fistly,Using Internet can save my time when I am busy.Then it can narrow the gap with friengs.Meanwhile,Photos taken recently can be e-mailed to others by this way.Maybe only in this way can we enjoy the rapid development of the Internet.
希望有一些自己的见解或者建议评价

1. Firstly, we should warmly love our nation,（warmly love 倒是没有语法错误,但不是地道英语,改为ardently love 或者 have deep love for）
2. show respect to our mainland and school. (mainland是大陆,排除了港澳台,应该用 motherland,另外和 school并列是大包小,改为： to our our motherland, 去掉school .)
3. Then,we need （a goal toward life 意思是：通往生活或生命的目标,改为：we need to set up a life goal）
4. which can remain us never to give up. (remain 用词不当,改为：remind )
5. Secondly, we should live with parents peacefully, respect our teacher and get along well with our classmates.( with parents 改为 with our parents；get along well with 与下文重复,改为：make friends with )
6. Surely, we need to learn how to get along with others, which is a social lesson everybody should learn. (lesson 是动词的逻辑宾语,应该是 learn from, “从中学到”)
7. Finally, as a high student, protecting the nature is our unavoidable responsibility. （protecting the nature 改为：protecting environment）
8. So,we need to save energy as energy is limited. （so 后加逗号）
9. Menwhile, Measures should be taken to keep animals and planets from dangers.（正确）
10. In my opinion, we students must study hard so that we are able to spare no effort to construct our nation and society. Only in this way can we enjoy life better.（正确）

There （are）basically two ways to write a letter. Both ways have their own advantages.
One way is to write a letter with a pen. In this way, you can convey your true feeling to others; What is more, Stamps will convey culture and history to people all over the world.
Another way is to send e-mails; it is not only convinnt (convenient) but also can save stamp cost. If you have friends abroad, the message can be sent to him whenever you want (添加 to).
As for me,I prefer to the latter. Fistly, using Internet can save my time when I am busy. Then it can narrow the gap with （my） friengs. Meanwhile, Photos taken recently can be e-mailed to others by this way. Maybe only in this way can we enjoy the rapid development of the Internet.
后一篇写得不错,连贯、通顺,句子基本正确,只是修辞方面还需斟酌.