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Yesterday was the weekend, My father, sister and I to the river to swim. Father river swimming, my sister and I were playing together in the shore. The water was cold. I was surprised they can actually swim in cold water. There were many people, everyone's very happy to play.
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Yesterday was weekend, My father, sister and I went to the river to swim. Father swam in the river, while （而，却）my sister and I were playing together on the shore. （在海岸用on)The water in the river was very cold. I was surprised that they could swim in cold water. There were many people, and everyone played very happily
从文章整体文章大意明确，但是老师希望你继续努力，再多积累一些词汇，同时注意一些连词，过渡词汇等的用法来加强文章的流畅性。
最终答案：略
解题过程：
Yesterday was weekend, My father, sister and I went to the river to swim. Father swam in the river, while （而，却）my sister and I were playing together on the shore. （在海岸用on)The water in the river was very cold. I was surprised that they could swim in cold water. There were many people, and everyone played very happily
从文章整体文章大意明确，但是老师希望你继续努力，再多积累一些词汇，同时注意一些连词，过渡词汇等的用法来加强文章的流畅性。
最终答案：略