帮我修改一下英语作文,主题是第一句.问题是议论文.
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帮我修改一下英语作文,主题是第一句.问题是议论文.
Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspirations.This sentences give we a message,god only give we a little.If you want success,we must do many.Another face,the one percent inspiration is also important.
The opinion is also mine.One person sit on his home,the money don’t go to his pocket.We must go to work.First,we should have ninety-nine percent perspirations.But you only have it,you will be failed.You must have inspiration.Only a little,you will have a better change.
Genius is one percent inspiration and ninety-nine percent perspirations.This sentences give we a message,god only give we a little.If you want success,we must do many.Another face,the one percent inspiration is also important.
The opinion is also mine.One person sit on his home,the money don’t go to his pocket.We must go to work.First,we should have ninety-nine percent perspirations.But you only have it,you will be failed.You must have inspiration.Only a little,you will have a better change.
Oh,my god.Your essay's structure is so messy.Why do you only have two paragraphs?I am now in Australia.Our standard is five paragraph.First paragraph is instruction,then two argue for and one argue against.Finally,you should put a conclusion.Oh,my god,I do not have the ability to correct your essay.I suggest you that you'd better re-write one in the structure that I mentioned before.Otherwise,the score of your essay in my view is zero!God!