英语作文麻烦改正～就是这篇作文..有任何问题全部指出来～Yesterday I received an e-mail f

英语作文麻烦改正～
就是这篇作文..
有任何问题全部指出来～
Yesterday I received an e-mail from my friends,Susan.And she tells me she’ll start her senior school in Port Augusta.And that’s quite different between Primary school and Middle school.Now I’ll tell you something about a day of different period of my friend Susan.
When she was a pupil of the school of the AIR she only needs five-minute walk across our farm but now she needs 20~30minutes bus ride.And she just studied about three hours and 45minute but now she has to spend more than seven hours.And the School of the Air’s advantages are use the telephone and Internet to communicate、small class、spend lots of time outside in nature and with animals and quiet、no traffic.And now she can create friendships with more students.And she can study more subjects、talk to the teacher every lesson.But there’re also many disadvantages of the School of the Air and Sydney High School.There’re not many students in the school of the Air.So Susan hasn’t many friends there.And she can’t study lots of subjects.And the students only talk to the teacher once a week.So the students not always easy to understand everything AND in Sydney High school there’re lots of noise、lots of students in the class and lots of homework..Susan sometimes play football on the farm、help put at home、reading after school.And now she can swimming、play football、go to computer club or photography club and do any sports as she like.
I hope she everything will OK in Middle school.

my friends应改为单数my friend
period应改为复数periods
needs 的时态不对,应为 need
20~30minutes 该为20~30minutes’
use the telephone前面加上to
spend lots of time outside in nature and with animals 前面也加上to
and quiet、no traffic改为quiet and no traffic
not always 前加上are
as she like改为likes
、reading after school为and reading after school
wish后可跟双宾语,hope后则不能,I hope she everything will OK in Middle school是不存在的.应改为 I hope everything will OK for her in Middle school.