急 英文询问信 帮忙检查一下有没有语法错误 Dear madam or sir:Thank you for your t

急 英文询问信 帮忙检查一下有没有语法错误 Dear madam or sir:Thank you for your time to read my lett

Thank you for you sparing some time to read my letter .
再问： I am 21 years old and am Chinese college student, I want to join the lee kong chian School of Business .who are well on family education, I have interested in business. And parents are business too. parents in their words and deeds that I have set a very positive view of the honesty ,and know the major of the team .
再答： I am Chinese college student ，21 years old 。 I want to join the lee kong chian School of Business .Which one is good on family education？I am interested in business. And parents are business too. parents in their words and deeds is that I have set a very positive view of the honesty ,and know the major of the team
再问： In order to temper themselves ,I use the holiday time to go to the supermarket for work. .70 percent of people have gave up the hard work but I insist on it .I m good at thinking the things flexible .I have joined the technological invention game and won the third place .At the same time I apply for a monopolization.
再答： In order to improve myself ,I used the holiday time to go to the supermarket for work. .70 percent of people have gave up the hard work but I insisted on it .I 'm good at thinking the things flexible .I joined the technological invention game and won the third place .At the same time I apply for a monopolization
再问： I have been considering to study in your school for quiet some time. I have some question the following: First I d also like to know I have no language achievement whether can be advanced school for learning and take the exam then . Second What are the professional of business ?