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英语短文改错My HometownMy hometown is a small countryside town. As

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My Hometown
My hometown is a small countryside town. As I didn’t go back to my hometown since1992. so I don’t know what’s population in it. There has some hills, a river, some fields. When I was young ,I very liked to climb the hill near my home. Sometimes I climbed the hill with my classmate. When we arrived at the hill top, we always had race, because all wanted to know who was first. I also remember when we went to school, we had to pass river. Sometimes we didn’t crossed the bridge, we swimed the water.. In holiday we could catch the small fish in the river. How a good time I had!
I like my hometown more than the city which I live, but people here are very poor. Because when the children only have finished junior middle school, they’re parent forced them to leave school, and go to cities to find work. And that make the hometown poorer and poorer.
I think I’ll come back to my hometown to build it more and more beautiful after finishing university.
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My Hometown
My hometown is a small town in the countryside.I had not been to there since I left it in 1992 and thus was not sure about the population there.I only remembered that there was a river,some hills and fields.When I was a child,what I like the most was climbing the hill near to my house.Sometimes,my classmate will join in and when we arrived at the top of the hill,we would always hve a race,we will use our full strength because no one wanted to lose to each other.I also remembered that we had to cross a river in order to reach the school.We rarely use the bridge but instead,choosed to swim over.During the holidays,we would catch the small fish in the river.What a fun childhood I had!
I like my hometown more than the city I live in now.However,the people in my hometown are very poor.Children were forced to go to work in the cities once they comleted their education in the middle schools.This did not help but instead,made the town even more poorer than before.
If I had the chance,I hope that I can return to my hometown one day and contribute my efforts to make it a beautiful small town.
I think I’ll come back to my hometown to build it more and more beautiful after finishing university.
我几乎是重新写了一遍唉.你的作文有很多语法错误,而且语言组织能力有点弱.不过你的单词量其实还蛮大的说.
记得多读英文书,看看别人如何组织语言,久而久之你也就学会了.不然像你这篇文其实很有趣,却全败在你的文笔上了.