作业帮帮我看看我的英语文章有没有错误好吗?
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帮我看看我的英语文章有没有错误好吗?
Dear Mr.Gates,
Thank you for your letter which concern about reinstalling and upgrading our system.
We have to,however,finalise some details in advance.
I’m afraid that the date you planned is unavailable because of our originally planned agenda.Your rescheduling would be helpful for us and I want to know exactly how long does the installment take?Furthermore,we require the engineer to install the system on weekend so that it will no influence our daily work.
In addition,we need to keep both of the systems in our company to insure the safety for a month.
I also want to know the engineer’s name and number in order to exchange information efficiently.
Look forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Greg Cai
Dear Mr.Gates,
Thank you for your letter which concern about reinstalling and upgrading our system.
We have to,however,finalise some details in advance.
I’m afraid that the date you planned is unavailable because of our originally planned agenda.Your rescheduling would be helpful for us and I want to know exactly how long does the installment take?Furthermore,we require the engineer to install the system on weekend so that it will no influence our daily work.
In addition,we need to keep both of the systems in our company to insure the safety for a month.
I also want to know the engineer’s name and number in order to exchange information efficiently.
Look forward to your reply.
Yours sincerely,
Greg Cai
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句子有点长,用短句会显得自然一点.有些词汇重复的有点多,而且逻辑句全是"我们要干.是为了."建议稍微修改一下,逻辑可以使用".是necessary,因为我们要..."或者"...会很helpful,因为我们要."等等的
不过我估计你是按最正式的要求写的吧,感觉很硬啊...
it will no(t) influence
两处
句子有点长,用短句会显得自然一点.有些词汇重复的有点多,而且逻辑句全是"我们要干.是为了."建议稍微修改一下,逻辑可以使用".是necessary,因为我们要..."或者"...会很helpful,因为我们要."等等的
不过我估计你是按最正式的要求写的吧,感觉很硬啊...