作业帮帮我看看这几句英语 写法对吗 帮我看仔细一点 谢谢
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帮我看看这几句英语 写法对吗 帮我看仔细一点 谢谢
大致上原文的语法错误不多,只想指出该是feel happier 而不是feel more happiness,the reason is simple,不是easy.
写作技巧及表达能力都有待改进,“money makes the mare to go”放在这里不恰当.
另引UN调查为助证,相信没什么根据吧!如想引用,必须详细列举出处,否则欠说服力.
文章开端的编排至为关键,如不能抓人眼球,就无法吸引人看下去.原文首段未能带出全文重点.
现按原文意思重写,以供参考：
Does making more money make one feel better?I believe there are two sides to every coin.
There certainly is a secret link between money and happiness.People who earn a good living are often happier than people who live in poverty.Having more money can be empowering.We can live better,treat ourselves and those around us better and feel better.
写作技巧及表达能力都有待改进,“money makes the mare to go”放在这里不恰当.
另引UN调查为助证,相信没什么根据吧!如想引用,必须详细列举出处,否则欠说服力.
文章开端的编排至为关键,如不能抓人眼球,就无法吸引人看下去.原文首段未能带出全文重点.
现按原文意思重写,以供参考：
Does making more money make one feel better?I believe there are two sides to every coin.
There certainly is a secret link between money and happiness.People who earn a good living are often happier than people who live in poverty.Having more money can be empowering.We can live better,treat ourselves and those around us better and feel better.