作业帮英语作文批改,求纠错.《growing pain》
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英语作文批改,求纠错.《growing pain》
Nothing is smooth sailing all the time.
\x05 Growing up is just like a kind of adventure,full of surprise ,excitement and coincidences.Of course,we have to meet dangers and troubles on the way.That's what life is,a bit ironic.It takes sadness to know what happiness is,noise to appreciate silence ,absence to value presence and pain to explain comfort.
\x05 Teenage time is the most lovely age in one's whole life.Can I use "a bottle of chocolates" to describe it?We never know what taste the next chocolate will be.Perhaps it is covered with cream,but bitter inside.No matter how it taste,we will remember it.The experience become part of our memory,kept in the deep of our heart.
\x05 Just talk about the chocolates,I bet no body doesn't like them.Probably it is because chocolates bring us warm,and soft.Usually,the process is not that perfect,some make us painful and want to give up.If you keep doing it,you will get the repayment.
\x05 Life will bring you pain all by itself,your responsibility is create joy.Smile can be the most useful way.Because "smiling makes it a little easier." Always smile,even if you're dying on the inside.You never know who will be cheered up by your smile.It can be the light in the dark room,the shining star over the quiet sky.
\x05 Growing brings us pains,but we get stronger and stronger because of it.
\x05 Growing makes us sad,but we become tougher and tougher from it .
\x05 Growing ruins our pure,but we turn saner and saner through it.
作文如下,有很多语法错误的样子.求批改.
Nothing is smooth sailing all the time.
\x05 Growing up is just like a kind of adventure,full of surprise ,excitement and coincidences.Of course,we have to meet dangers and troubles on the way.That's what life is,a bit ironic.It takes sadness to know what happiness is,noise to appreciate silence ,absence to value presence and pain to explain comfort.
\x05 Teenage time is the most lovely age in one's whole life.Can I use "a bottle of chocolates" to describe it?We never know what taste the next chocolate will be.Perhaps it is covered with cream,but bitter inside.No matter how it taste,we will remember it.The experience become part of our memory,kept in the deep of our heart.
\x05 Just talk about the chocolates,I bet no body doesn't like them.Probably it is because chocolates bring us warm,and soft.Usually,the process is not that perfect,some make us painful and want to give up.If you keep doing it,you will get the repayment.
\x05 Life will bring you pain all by itself,your responsibility is create joy.Smile can be the most useful way.Because "smiling makes it a little easier." Always smile,even if you're dying on the inside.You never know who will be cheered up by your smile.It can be the light in the dark room,the shining star over the quiet sky.
\x05 Growing brings us pains,but we get stronger and stronger because of it.
\x05 Growing makes us sad,but we become tougher and tougher from it .
\x05 Growing ruins our pure,but we turn saner and saner through it.
作文如下,有很多语法错误的样子.求批改.
【修改建议】
Nothing is smooth sailing all the time.改为 Nothing more is smooth thansailing all the time.
we have to meet dangers and troubles on the way 改为 we have to come up againstdangers and troubles on the way
the most lovely age 改为the loveliest age【以-ly 结尾的双音节形容词的最高级不能用 the most】
a bottle of chocolates 改为a can of chocolates 【巧克力一般是盒装】
No matter how it taste,we will remember it 改为No matter what taste the chocolateis,it will burn in your mind with its special savor.【原句taste 应该用单数第三人称形式】
The experience become part of our memory,kept in the deep of ourheart 改为 such an experienceis sure to become a part of our memory and to be kept in the deep of our heart
Just talk about the chocolates 改为Just fancy the flavour any of the chocolates
the process is not that perfect,some make us painful and want togive up 改为 growing up isnot sampling a chocolate and the process may not be that perfect,for some willmake us bear pain and we have to give them up 【前面加一过渡句,使前后意义自然衔接起来】
our responsibility is create joy 改为our responsibility is to create joy
Because "smiling makes it a little easier." 改为 Because "smiling makes thingsa little easier."【it 指代不明】
Always smile 改为 Always keep smiling
It can be the light in the dark room,the shining star over thequiet sky 【两句中间或者用分号,或者用 and 连接】
文章写得比较流畅,有少数语法错误,以上多是从修辞方面提出修改建议.
Nothing is smooth sailing all the time.改为 Nothing more is smooth thansailing all the time.
we have to meet dangers and troubles on the way 改为 we have to come up againstdangers and troubles on the way
the most lovely age 改为the loveliest age【以-ly 结尾的双音节形容词的最高级不能用 the most】
a bottle of chocolates 改为a can of chocolates 【巧克力一般是盒装】
No matter how it taste,we will remember it 改为No matter what taste the chocolateis,it will burn in your mind with its special savor.【原句taste 应该用单数第三人称形式】
The experience become part of our memory,kept in the deep of ourheart 改为 such an experienceis sure to become a part of our memory and to be kept in the deep of our heart
Just talk about the chocolates 改为Just fancy the flavour any of the chocolates
the process is not that perfect,some make us painful and want togive up 改为 growing up isnot sampling a chocolate and the process may not be that perfect,for some willmake us bear pain and we have to give them up 【前面加一过渡句,使前后意义自然衔接起来】
our responsibility is create joy 改为our responsibility is to create joy
Because "smiling makes it a little easier." 改为 Because "smiling makes thingsa little easier."【it 指代不明】
Always smile 改为 Always keep smiling
It can be the light in the dark room,the shining star over thequiet sky 【两句中间或者用分号,或者用 and 连接】
文章写得比较流畅,有少数语法错误,以上多是从修辞方面提出修改建议.