英文高手帮忙看看这个自我介绍还有哪里需要修改的,

英文高手帮忙看看这个自我介绍还有哪里需要修改的,
如题,哪里还需要修改和完善的,比如语法问题,各段落和各句的连接问题,用词和措辞问题等等.
Good day everybody!It is really a great honor to have this opportunity for introducing myself here.I hope I can make a good impression on you.
My name is Zhang Bingjie.I was born in Xingjiang,a remote place where I spent my happy childhood.In 2000,I graduated from ABC University,major in Chinese language and literature.Shortly after my graduation,I left my hometown and came to Shanghai.Thereafter,I started to live on my own and learned to face the social pressure alone.
10 years,only a drop in the ocean of human history,makes me from an innocent girl to a mature and independent woman.In these years,I’ve worked in several companies with different bosses and different colleagues,started as an office clerk and became a top manager finally.The industries that I’ve engaged in ranging from advertizing,manufacture to logistics.The last two companies that I’ve worked for belongs to logistics industry.From 2005 to 2008,I served as General Manager’s assistant and later manager of management department in Shanghai ABC Company which is one of the most prestigious customs clearance agencies in Shanghai.During the time,I learned a great deal of knowledge in customs affairs.Based on these knowledge,A performance appraisal system for all level employees among the company had been designed and implemented.It turns out that the system is effective for improving work efficiency and quality.From 2008 to 2010,I worked as a project manager of logistics department in YN Ltd.There,my key tasks is to Supervise and control the whole process of logistics project,ranging from booking,picking up goods,ocean shipping/sea transportation,customs clearance,transportation by land or rail to final delivery.As a result,I got much practical experience of logistics operation.Moreover,during 2005 and 2008,I completed all the self-study courses on English language and literature in Shanghai International Studies University and got the second bachelor’s degree.
In 2010,I got a baby girl and then quit the job.Now,I am a happy mother and a satisfied wife.But I also need to have my own career.So,I’m here now.
Before I close,something I must say is,sometimes youth has nothing to do with age,because youth is a kind of mind-set and spirit.Often,ability has nothing to do with diploma,because ability increases in practice.I’m the one with positive attitude and rich experience.Please give my application materials a serious consideration and then give me a chance,I’m sure I will give you a surprise in return.
Thank you very much!

(1)have this opportunity to introduce myself here
(2) give you a good impression.但我觉得这条内容不好,表达的清楚,自然给人印象好,不需要强调
(3) majored in Chinese language
(4)live on my own and learned to face social pressure alone,感觉这个句子不太适合,start my career and learned to how to survive in competitve society 个人意见
(5) 第3段落组织不好,没什么连贯性,呵呵纯粹个人意见
(6)爱好什么,可以涉及点