作业帮谁能帮我改改我的这段作文.
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谁能帮我改改我的这段作文.
只是个例子：
Take my piano student Candy for example. Her father is a successful business man who earns a huge amount of money every year. However, after learning the good news that Candy won the first prize in a piano competition, her father said gladly, the awards my daughter won offered me amazing feeling that no matter how much money I earned can never compare with it.
主要改语法和更好的表达.多谢!
只是个例子：
Take my piano student Candy for example. Her father is a successful business man who earns a huge amount of money every year. However, after learning the good news that Candy won the first prize in a piano competition, her father said gladly, the awards my daughter won offered me amazing feeling that no matter how much money I earned can never compare with it.
主要改语法和更好的表达.多谢!
Take Candy,my piano student for example. Her father is a successful business man who earns much money every year. While learning the good news that Candy wins the first prize in a piano competition, her father says excitedly, "The awards my daughter wins offers me an amazing feeling that everything money brings to me can never exceed."
再问： 多谢当当！嘿嘿。。可是为什么要用一般现在时啊。。
再答： 陈述用一般现在时和过去时其实都可以,只是我更喜欢现在时,感觉更流畅.
再问： 多谢当当！嘿嘿。。可是为什么要用一般现在时啊。。
再答： 陈述用一般现在时和过去时其实都可以,只是我更喜欢现在时,感觉更流畅.