请英语好的好心人帮忙完成这篇作文,只剩几句话不会了.然后帮我修改下错误,加语法~感激不尽!

请英语好的好心人帮忙完成这篇作文,只剩几句话不会了.然后帮我修改下错误,加语法~感激不尽!
I remembered I was preparing to go abroad in April last year.At that time,I was a senior 3 student,I would want to go to university in America to study finance and economic.But I felt my way of going abroad special not smooth.I applied for American visa about 3 times,but I wasn’t passed.
I remembered the last time to apply the American visa to go to Beijing only myself,I was get up at six in the morning to go to the embassy,but I wasn’t get the visa again,I felt very bad.I thought this is last time,but I never stopped my dream.So now,I am in Canada to finish my dream.
这是第一次离开父母,还记得在机场分别的那一刻我就清楚以后一切都要靠自己了.About 11 hours later,when I received Vancouver the first things is go through the formalities,when I finished,I was only want to call my mother.But I won’t use public phone,I bought a cup of coke and got some change.I put all the change has cast in it and useless.I felt very helpless and I was flummoxed until I met a Chinese.The next day,my abroad life is just beginning.
During this time,I am not only study the English ,I think I learned how to study hard,I remembered I got 0 marks for my first writing.我特别难受,事实上从高中起我就没有因为成绩而哭过.之后我的压力就更大了.我也越来越努力,还记得第一次speaking的时候我一个周末不间断的在ready this speaking.因为我害怕我又让自己失望.现在我特别能体会因为努力而来的收获的感觉特别美好.
I miss my family every day,我不习惯这边的一切,我已经在慢慢适应了.但是我希望有个全新的我.当我再次出现在他们面前,让那些曾经瞧不起我的人,和那些爱我的人为我感到自豪.
现在特别能体会My home is the warmest place for me.East or west,home is best.我的留学梦还很长,我会一直走下去.

I remembered I was preparing to go abroad in April last year. At that time, I was a senior 3 student, I would want to go to university in America to study finance and economic. But I felt my way of going abroad special not smooth. I applied for American visa about 3 times, but I wasn’t passed.
I remembered the last time to apply the American visa to go to Beijing only myself, I was get up at six in the morning to go to the embassy, but I wasn’t get the visa again, I felt very bad. I thought this is last time, but I never stopped my dream. So now, I am in Canada to finish my dream.
这是第一次离开父母,还记得在机场分别的那一刻我就清楚以后一切都要靠自己了.About 11 hours later, when I received Vancouver the first things is go through the formalities, when I finished, I was only want to call my mother. But I won’t use public phone, I bought a cup of coke and got some change. I put all the change has cast in it and useless. I felt very helpless and I was flummoxed until I met a Chinese. The next day, my abroad life is just beginning.
During this time, I am not only study the English ,I think I learned how to study hard, I remembered I got 0 marks for my first writing. 我特别难受,事实上从高中起我就没有因为成绩而哭过.之后我的压力就更大了.我也越来越努力,还记得第一次speaking的时候我一个周末不间断的在ready this speaking. 因为我害怕我又让自己失望.现在我特别能体会因为努力而来的收获的感觉特别美好.
I miss my family every day, 我不习惯这边的一切,我已经在慢慢适应了.但是我希望有个全新的我.当我再次出现在他们面前,让那些曾经瞧不起我的人,和那些爱我的人为我感到自豪.
现在特别能体会My home is the warmest place for me. East or west, home is best.我的留学梦还很长,我会一直走下去.
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