作业帮summer holiday 帮忙修改一下
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summer holiday 帮忙修改一下
这是我自己写的一篇作文,有一些地方不太确定,或是不知道怎么表述,希望各位帮忙看看,改改,谢谢了!主要看时态问题,用词搭配和我括号里所提到的,希望改时能将改好的文章发上来,可以的话,加上更改原因.
Summer holiday
Summer holiday is coming,we are all happy!On summer holiday we can do lots of things.Ican swim.I can play with my friends. I can （have a trip）这里是外出旅游,怎样表述更好 with my parents.
This summer I went to (Zhangjiajie)地名张家界,书写有无问题There were so many mountains.后面帮忙翻译一下啊（这里风景秀丽.我们玩的很开心.这次出游我还学到了很多民俗文化.）
This is my summer holiday.
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这是我自己写的一篇作文,有一些地方不太确定,或是不知道怎么表述,希望各位帮忙看看,改改,谢谢了!主要看时态问题,用词搭配和我括号里所提到的,希望改时能将改好的文章发上来,可以的话,加上更改原因.
Summer holiday
Summer holiday is coming,we are all happy!On summer holiday we can do lots of things.Ican swim.I can play with my friends. I can （have a trip）这里是外出旅游,怎样表述更好 with my parents.
This summer I went to (Zhangjiajie)地名张家界,书写有无问题There were so many mountains.后面帮忙翻译一下啊（这里风景秀丽.我们玩的很开心.这次出游我还学到了很多民俗文化.）
This is my summer holiday.
回答得好,追加分!
不错呀!
只是两段话好像有点“时差”,前面一段好像是暑假快到说的,后面好像是暑假快结束说的.做一个调整会好一些.
建议把第一段改为暑假快结束的口吻写.
例如：
The summer holiday is nearly the end.During this holiday,I did lots of things,for exmple,I played with my friends,I had a trip with my parents.
后面的翻译参考：It was amazing and really beautiful!We learnt a lot about folk culture,and we had a good time there.
只是两段话好像有点“时差”,前面一段好像是暑假快到说的,后面好像是暑假快结束说的.做一个调整会好一些.
建议把第一段改为暑假快结束的口吻写.
例如：
The summer holiday is nearly the end.During this holiday,I did lots of things,for exmple,I played with my friends,I had a trip with my parents.
后面的翻译参考：It was amazing and really beautiful!We learnt a lot about folk culture,and we had a good time there.