英语高手帮忙检查一下这一篇文章有什么语病或用词不当!谢谢!

英语高手帮忙检查一下这一篇文章有什么语病或用词不当!谢谢!
如有不当,请修改后给我.
The Spring Festival is the most important festival for the Chinese people and is when all family members get together, just like Christmas in the West. All the people live away from home go back..
It is in January or February.On that day,children wear new clothes . In the evening before the Spring Festival ,families get together and have a big meal and watch Spring Festival Gala.All the people are very happy.
People celebrate Spring Festival in many ways.They always eat dunmplings and clean their houses. People put New Year scrolls on the wall for good fortune . The Spring Festival lasts about 15 days long .People visit relatives and friends with the words “Have all your wishes ”. In many places people like to let off fireworks .
Children like the festival very much ,because they can have delicious food and wear new clothes .They can also get red packet from their parents. This money gives the children good luck .
People enjoy the Spring Festival ,during this time they can have a good rest .
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修改：1. ...and it is when all family.
2. People who live away from home shall all get back. 定语从句的引导词丢了.
3. It大写
5. On the eve of the Spring Festival, ...
6. Everyone is very happy.
7. the Spring Festival,冠词没加.
9. always一词应当去掉.
12. Have all your wishes, 这是你自己创造出来的问候语吧?不如用Best wishes to you all.
16. This money is supposed to bring the children good luck.
以上仅是把你的语法错误更正了一下,风格什么的没有动.我觉得你写的有点逻辑混乱,层次不分明.可以自己再改改.
再问： 那你再帮我改改文章被
再答： The Spring Festival is the most important festival for the Chinese. It is the Chinese New Year when all family members get together, just like Christmas in the West. All the people living away from home go back. It is usually in January or February and lasts about 15 days long. Two weeks before the Spring Festival, people have started to clean their houses and get all the materials needed ready. People celebrate the Spring Festival in many ways. They put scrolls on the wall and play firecrackers in many parts of China for good fortune. On the eve of the Spring Festival, all family members have a big dinner and watch the Spring Festival Gala together. On the Chinese New Year’s Day, children wear new clothes. People visit relatives and friends and wish one another good wishes. Everybody is happy. For adult, the Spring Festival is a time when they can have a good rest. For children it is like carnival because they can have delicious food and wear new clothes. Another reason is that they get red packets from their parents and relatives. This money is supposed to bring children good luck. (再写一个结尾就比较完整了)