如果你们是评委的话,针对这篇英语演讲都会提什么问题呢?【本人初三】

如果你们是评委的话,针对这篇英语演讲都会提什么问题呢?【本人初三】
这是我的演讲稿,如果你们是评委的话都会针对这演讲稿提些什么问题呢?你们所认为的较好的答案是什么呢?
As you slowly open your eyes,look around,notice where the light comes into your room;listen carefully,see if there are new sounds you can recognize;feel your body and spirit,and see if you can sense the freshness in the air.
Yes,yes,yes,it's a new day,it's a different day,it's a bright day!It's a new beginning for your life.A beginning whereyou are going to make new delicious,take new acitons,make new friends and take your life to a totally unprecedented level!
you will focus all your time and effort on the most important goals of your life.You will never succumb to challenge of hardships.
You will never waver in your pursuit of excellence.After all,your are the best and you deserve the best!
The door to all the best things in the world will open to you ,but the key to that door is in your hand.You must do your part,you must faithfully your plans you make and take to actions you plan,you must never quit,you must never fear,I know you must do it,you can do it,you will do it and you will succeed!Please remember it:You must never,never,never,never give up!Now stand firm and tall,make a fist,get excited and yell it out:
I must do it!I can do it!I will do it!I will succeed!
I must do it!I can do it!I will do it!I will succeed!
I must do it!I can do it!I will do it!I will succeed!

1, make new delicious应该是make new decisions
2,结束演讲时,后面不必机械重复,但有说的有力量,语调要激昂
3,整篇抒情,开头的以细腻开篇,我猜你是个情感细腻的女生吧,这很好,但要看看你的演讲时是否足够感人,别忘了你的表情也是一种语言哦
4,我不太提倡这种纯抒情的演讲,要是在加入一些具体的东西就不显得空洞了.比如数据,事例.