作业帮请大家帮我修改下这篇英语日记谢谢!
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请大家帮我修改下这篇英语日记谢谢!
第一句改为:It's my father 来强调一下这件事是父亲让我做的而非处于自愿.
然后我上气不接下气这些,也用It’s 来作为主语比较好.英文中,直接用动名词作主语可以,但是最好还是用It’s结构代替动名词更好.
然后说我父亲的决定是正确的,可以直接说：My father is right.
后一句也是同样,用it’s 结构更合适.
然后父亲带我们去什么地方,这里有两个人的时候,始终把自己放到and后面；
这件事对我比较容易但对他不容易,可以直接用一个 than来表示；
Fat用在这里不太合适,因为这个词太不客气,可以用big或overweight来表示；
因此,建议改为：
I ride my bike for a while every day.In fact,it’s my dad who makes me do it.We usually go to Jin Mountain by bike together.It makes me hot and breathless to cycle uphill.But my dad is right.It helps to build up my leg muscles and makes me more athletic and healthier.
My dad took my cousin and me to Qidu Bridge tonight.It’s easier for me than my cousin,because I exercise every day while he doesn’t.He is pretty overweight.He completed the whole distance anyway.I believed that he could be strong and fit some day.
Keeping exercise is important for all of us.We should carry on no matter any difficulties we encounter.
然后我上气不接下气这些,也用It’s 来作为主语比较好.英文中,直接用动名词作主语可以,但是最好还是用It’s结构代替动名词更好.
然后说我父亲的决定是正确的,可以直接说：My father is right.
后一句也是同样,用it’s 结构更合适.
然后父亲带我们去什么地方,这里有两个人的时候,始终把自己放到and后面；
这件事对我比较容易但对他不容易,可以直接用一个 than来表示；
Fat用在这里不太合适,因为这个词太不客气,可以用big或overweight来表示；
因此,建议改为：
I ride my bike for a while every day.In fact,it’s my dad who makes me do it.We usually go to Jin Mountain by bike together.It makes me hot and breathless to cycle uphill.But my dad is right.It helps to build up my leg muscles and makes me more athletic and healthier.
My dad took my cousin and me to Qidu Bridge tonight.It’s easier for me than my cousin,because I exercise every day while he doesn’t.He is pretty overweight.He completed the whole distance anyway.I believed that he could be strong and fit some day.
Keeping exercise is important for all of us.We should carry on no matter any difficulties we encounter.