作业帮面试英语自我介绍求改.
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面试英语自我介绍求改.
全文如下：
Hello everyone,my name is XXX.This is really a great honor to have this opportunity,and I believe I can make good performance today.Now I will introduce myself briefly.I am 18 years old and I am a senior student at XX No.X high school.
I'm keen on computer games,and my love for that dates back to my childhood.Having realized that most of games are just for entertainment,I dream of a game which can be called the ninth art.In order to realize it,I studyed programming in senior school,and got the first prize in NOIP2008.I know,it required a wealth of knowledge,So I studied hard and read many books.I believe,through my continuous hard work,my dream will came true.
That's all.Thank you for giving me the chance.
1 指出立意、叙述上的失误（比如内容上有所欠缺）
2 指出词句上的失当（比如句式重复,缺乏文采等）
3 指出语法上的错误
等等……
只要是有什么意见就都说出来吧……
全文如下：
Hello everyone,my name is XXX.This is really a great honor to have this opportunity,and I believe I can make good performance today.Now I will introduce myself briefly.I am 18 years old and I am a senior student at XX No.X high school.
I'm keen on computer games,and my love for that dates back to my childhood.Having realized that most of games are just for entertainment,I dream of a game which can be called the ninth art.In order to realize it,I studyed programming in senior school,and got the first prize in NOIP2008.I know,it required a wealth of knowledge,So I studied hard and read many books.I believe,through my continuous hard work,my dream will came true.
That's all.Thank you for giving me the chance.
1 指出立意、叙述上的失误（比如内容上有所欠缺）
2 指出词句上的失当（比如句式重复,缺乏文采等）
3 指出语法上的错误
等等……
只要是有什么意见就都说出来吧……
面试英文一定要条理清晰,目的性强,开门见山,礼貌得体.
Good morning/Good afternoon,Sir and (or) Madam.
Thank you for giving me such a great opportunity to introduce myself to you.My name is XXX,and I am 18 years old.Now I am a senior student at XX No.X High School.(是否可以这样讲,会好一点：I am going to graduate from XX No.X High School in a couple of months?)
（你想干嘛,要开门见山）I am very interested in the position (or XX chance) provided by your company and I believe my personality and qualifications pretty match the requirements.
(你为什么适合这个位置或机会,要一点一点讲,每一点的第一句要先总括一下,让面试官先有个印象）First of all,I am a self-motivated person,and enjoy working in computer world.I love computer games and such kind of passion could be traced back even from my childhood.However,having realized that most of games are just for entertainment,I dreamed of a game which could be called the ninth art.In order to realize it,I devoted myself into studying programming in senior school,and got the first prize in NOIP2008.I know,it requirs a wealth of knowledge and technique,so I studied hard and read many books.I believe,through my continuous hard work,some day my dream will came true.
Sencondly,.(你要想说服面试官,除了上述优点,还能找出一个吗?比如讲你如何努力学习英语,如果没有,就将上一段的first of all去掉)
(既然是面试,在最后一定要点出你这次自我介绍的目的)I have keen desire to be part of your company (or your team),I'm sure I will make positive contribution through my hard work.
That's all.Thank you for your time.
我也曾面试过很多人,
Good morning/Good afternoon,Sir and (or) Madam.
Thank you for giving me such a great opportunity to introduce myself to you.My name is XXX,and I am 18 years old.Now I am a senior student at XX No.X High School.(是否可以这样讲,会好一点：I am going to graduate from XX No.X High School in a couple of months?)
（你想干嘛,要开门见山）I am very interested in the position (or XX chance) provided by your company and I believe my personality and qualifications pretty match the requirements.
(你为什么适合这个位置或机会,要一点一点讲,每一点的第一句要先总括一下,让面试官先有个印象）First of all,I am a self-motivated person,and enjoy working in computer world.I love computer games and such kind of passion could be traced back even from my childhood.However,having realized that most of games are just for entertainment,I dreamed of a game which could be called the ninth art.In order to realize it,I devoted myself into studying programming in senior school,and got the first prize in NOIP2008.I know,it requirs a wealth of knowledge and technique,so I studied hard and read many books.I believe,through my continuous hard work,some day my dream will came true.
Sencondly,.(你要想说服面试官,除了上述优点,还能找出一个吗?比如讲你如何努力学习英语,如果没有,就将上一段的first of all去掉)
(既然是面试,在最后一定要点出你这次自我介绍的目的)I have keen desire to be part of your company (or your team),I'm sure I will make positive contribution through my hard work.
That's all.Thank you for your time.
我也曾面试过很多人,