作业帮跪求修改一篇关于梦想的作文达到大一水准,越丰富越好,重金可赏!
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跪求修改一篇关于梦想的作文达到大一水准,越丰富越好,重金可赏!
我今年大一,要参加学校演讲,帮我修改一下我的语法错误,提高我的文采,只要有任何一个词可以用更漂亮的语言表达出来,任何一句话可以用更好的句法讲出来都行,最好达到大三水准,我会重金酬谢的!Good morning,everybody!It’s my honor to speak here,and I’m very glad to share my topicwith you.Then today I’d like to talk something about------ ‘dream’.When I saw this topic for the first time,I immediately thought of thefamous speech ‘I have a dream’ from Martin LutherKing.As we all know,his dream was toeliminaterace discrimination.And he succeeded in the end.What is a dream?I’ve kept this questionin my mind for many years.As I grow mature,I think I seem to realize the trueessence of the dream,that is------ hope.When thinking about the dream in myheart,I seem to hesitate a lot.I have got too many different dreams in differenttime of my life,such as being a doctor,studying at Brown,one of the mostfamous universities in USA and so on.But,not until I came to have thiscontest,I finally got the right answer,that is happiness.I hope ofhappiness.I hope I could have a happy family.Allthe family member could be united and harmonious.All my zhangbei would be long live so that they could share my success in thenear future.I hope my dad,single parent,could no longer worry about me.Ihope happiness,could forever exist in my family.I hope myself could also live happily,even if I’m ordinary.I could have a true friend,even if just one.I hope Icould have someone to love,even if just one.Then,I will no longer get lonelybut happy.Last but not least,I also have got a bitmore to wish,that is,I hope Chinese society could own more and more positive.We needn’t worry about the cheat.We needn’t worry about our environment.Weneedn’t worry about the image of all our Chinese in front of the foreigners.Anyway,I didn’t want to see anyone around me live in negative but happiness.i’mlooking forward to see our bright future full of happiness.This is the dream in my heart,dream ismotivation.This is the hope in my heart,hope------is the best thing in the world.Thank you for your listening,that’s all.
我今年大一,要参加学校演讲,帮我修改一下我的语法错误,提高我的文采,只要有任何一个词可以用更漂亮的语言表达出来,任何一句话可以用更好的句法讲出来都行,最好达到大三水准,我会重金酬谢的!Good morning,everybody!It’s my honor to speak here,and I’m very glad to share my topicwith you.Then today I’d like to talk something about------ ‘dream’.When I saw this topic for the first time,I immediately thought of thefamous speech ‘I have a dream’ from Martin LutherKing.As we all know,his dream was toeliminaterace discrimination.And he succeeded in the end.What is a dream?I’ve kept this questionin my mind for many years.As I grow mature,I think I seem to realize the trueessence of the dream,that is------ hope.When thinking about the dream in myheart,I seem to hesitate a lot.I have got too many different dreams in differenttime of my life,such as being a doctor,studying at Brown,one of the mostfamous universities in USA and so on.But,not until I came to have thiscontest,I finally got the right answer,that is happiness.I hope ofhappiness.I hope I could have a happy family.Allthe family member could be united and harmonious.All my zhangbei would be long live so that they could share my success in thenear future.I hope my dad,single parent,could no longer worry about me.Ihope happiness,could forever exist in my family.I hope myself could also live happily,even if I’m ordinary.I could have a true friend,even if just one.I hope Icould have someone to love,even if just one.Then,I will no longer get lonelybut happy.Last but not least,I also have got a bitmore to wish,that is,I hope Chinese society could own more and more positive.We needn’t worry about the cheat.We needn’t worry about our environment.Weneedn’t worry about the image of all our Chinese in front of the foreigners.Anyway,I didn’t want to see anyone around me live in negative but happiness.i’mlooking forward to see our bright future full of happiness.This is the dream in my heart,dream ismotivation.This is the hope in my heart,hope------is the best thing in the world.Thank you for your listening,that’s all.
Good morning, everyone!
I feel it a great honor to have the opportunity to speak here, and to share with you my today's topic about "dream" . 'I have a dream.’ As you all know, this is the topic of a famous speech by Martin Luther King, an American social activist. Dr. King's dream was to eliminate racial discrimination. And despite many obstacles and being assassinated because of his dream, Dr. King's dream was eventually realized to some extent when African-Americans were allowed to cast votes in elections of different political areas.
I have a dream too! "What is my dream then," some of you may ask. To be honest with you, I've been asking myself this same question for many years. For a long time, I didn't know what my dream was. As I grow mature, I seem to realize the true essence of a dream, that is, hope! A dream is your hope. But even then, I would hesitate to tell others what my dream or hope was deep in my heart. It appeared that I had many different dreams at different times of my life, such as being a doctor, studying at Brown, one of the most famous universities in USA, etc.. But, it was not until I came to participate in this contest did I finally realize that my dream, my hope was no other than "happiness." I dream about being happy and I hope I've found happiness. I dream and hope I have a happy family where all members are united and live harmoniously; all my zhangbei will live a long life so that they can share the joy of my success in the near future. I dream and hope that my dad, a single parent, will no longer worry about me and that happiness will forever exist in my family. Besides my extended family, I also dream and hope to have a happy small family of my own, to have someone to love and to be loved, and I will no longer get lonely. Last but not the least, I also dream and hope that our Chinese society will become more and more positive and optimsitic - by-gones are our worries about cheating, about the environment, and about our images of being Chinese in front of the foreigners. All around me, I dream and hope all's happy and nothing negative and the future is bright and full of happiness.
This is 'the' (发“第”的音) dream deep in my heart. Dream is hope and hope is motivation. Together, we shall fulfill our dreams and realize our hopes.
Thank you for your time and patience.
再问： 麻烦你可不可以告诉我 optimsitic - by-gones什么意思，其实我才高一嘿嘿。（我写成这样也很不容易了有木有），不管怎么样，真的谢谢你了！
再答： 我觉得你写得确实不错，但你遇到了一个严师。 不要因为我的修改而觉得你不行。千万不可。在美国本土出生长大的高中生，大学生写的文章，让我修改，都遭受同样的命运。 optimistic=乐观，积极向上， 经常与positive连用。 by-gones=一去不复返；别了。
I feel it a great honor to have the opportunity to speak here, and to share with you my today's topic about "dream" . 'I have a dream.’ As you all know, this is the topic of a famous speech by Martin Luther King, an American social activist. Dr. King's dream was to eliminate racial discrimination. And despite many obstacles and being assassinated because of his dream, Dr. King's dream was eventually realized to some extent when African-Americans were allowed to cast votes in elections of different political areas.
I have a dream too! "What is my dream then," some of you may ask. To be honest with you, I've been asking myself this same question for many years. For a long time, I didn't know what my dream was. As I grow mature, I seem to realize the true essence of a dream, that is, hope! A dream is your hope. But even then, I would hesitate to tell others what my dream or hope was deep in my heart. It appeared that I had many different dreams at different times of my life, such as being a doctor, studying at Brown, one of the most famous universities in USA, etc.. But, it was not until I came to participate in this contest did I finally realize that my dream, my hope was no other than "happiness." I dream about being happy and I hope I've found happiness. I dream and hope I have a happy family where all members are united and live harmoniously; all my zhangbei will live a long life so that they can share the joy of my success in the near future. I dream and hope that my dad, a single parent, will no longer worry about me and that happiness will forever exist in my family. Besides my extended family, I also dream and hope to have a happy small family of my own, to have someone to love and to be loved, and I will no longer get lonely. Last but not the least, I also dream and hope that our Chinese society will become more and more positive and optimsitic - by-gones are our worries about cheating, about the environment, and about our images of being Chinese in front of the foreigners. All around me, I dream and hope all's happy and nothing negative and the future is bright and full of happiness.
This is 'the' (发“第”的音) dream deep in my heart. Dream is hope and hope is motivation. Together, we shall fulfill our dreams and realize our hopes.
Thank you for your time and patience.
再问： 麻烦你可不可以告诉我 optimsitic - by-gones什么意思，其实我才高一嘿嘿。（我写成这样也很不容易了有木有），不管怎么样，真的谢谢你了！
再答： 我觉得你写得确实不错，但你遇到了一个严师。 不要因为我的修改而觉得你不行。千万不可。在美国本土出生长大的高中生，大学生写的文章，让我修改，都遭受同样的命运。 optimistic=乐观，积极向上， 经常与positive连用。 by-gones=一去不复返；别了。