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麻烦帮我修改下这篇信,看看有没有格式,语法,单词的错误,
Dear Phoebe
I am writing this letter to tell you the changes in my life since our homework has reduced.
Before that,our homework load was too demanding.Every day,we have many exercises that we can't complete and many books that we can't finish reading.The teachers continually repeat the words that we are already able to recite.Teachers and students all work hard in order to enter a good company to apply for an excellent job.But the burden of work in class is so heavy that we have little time to do sports,which has left many of us in poor health.What's worse,many students have lost interest in their studies altogether.
Nevertheless,it is known to all that good health is as important as knowledge.Since reducing the learning burden,my life has become much more interesting.We have more and more time and opportunity to be exposed to society so we can learn what can't be taught from books.I no longer stay up late; on the contrary,I go to bed at 10 PM.
All in all,I am quite satisfied with my life now.Looking forward to your reply ASAP.
Best wishes,
Yours truly,
Caroline
1、第一句,since 改为 after,since强调持续性,这里是时间点的概念,after更好
2、第二句,"our homework load was too demanding" load 和demanding搭配上不太好,可以很简单的"I have too much homework to do"就行了呗,言简意赅.
3、第三句,"we have many exercises that we can't complete" 逻辑上有问题,老师布置的作业怎么会“不能”完成?是客观上不可以完成,还是因为太多太难而难以完成?可以说的具体一些,比如:Every day,we have too many exercises that we can hardly complete in time.
4、下一句最好不要用 apply for,apply for 是申请的意思,申请是没什么难度的,谁都可以申请,难的是得到一份好工作,所以直接用简单的 get 就行了.而且这句话中的主语里有teachers,也有点问题,teachers 已经有工作了,他们不用再“申请”了吧~