作业帮求高手改一下我刚写的一篇2009年6月的英语六级作文,
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求高手改一下我刚写的一篇2009年6月的英语六级作文,
09年6月的六级作文题是：
1有人认为名字很重要
2也有人认为无关紧要,
3我认为
The Inprotance Of a name
In recent years,the topic of the inportance of a name has aroused pervasive attention.As we all know,some people even turn to perfassional consult for a good name.While with the passage of time,defferent voices rise over whether should name divide into good or bad?
Some people hold the opinion that a good name deserves everything.For them,a good name not only influence their emotion,but also may lead to some unexpected rewards.Such as weathey,social status and promotion prospects.
On the contrary,other people take the opposing view that a good name is nothing.For one thing,names have long been set as a symbol of a person.What’s more,it can help us communicatae with each other conveniently..For another,only with a good name can our not enlarge our konwledge and develop our character.
In my point of view,there shouldn’t be a distinction between good names or bad names.
I don’t think some names will replace others completely or some names will despair in the near future.
09年6月的六级作文题是：
1有人认为名字很重要
2也有人认为无关紧要,
3我认为
The Inprotance Of a name
In recent years,the topic of the inportance of a name has aroused pervasive attention.As we all know,some people even turn to perfassional consult for a good name.While with the passage of time,defferent voices rise over whether should name divide into good or bad?
Some people hold the opinion that a good name deserves everything.For them,a good name not only influence their emotion,but also may lead to some unexpected rewards.Such as weathey,social status and promotion prospects.
On the contrary,other people take the opposing view that a good name is nothing.For one thing,names have long been set as a symbol of a person.What’s more,it can help us communicatae with each other conveniently..For another,only with a good name can our not enlarge our konwledge and develop our character.
In my point of view,there shouldn’t be a distinction between good names or bad names.
I don’t think some names will replace others completely or some names will despair in the near future.
是importance...professional.different...
"While with the passage of time",这句话也有问题,表示“随着时光流逝”可以这样表达——As time goes by
还有, whether should name divide into good or bad?有问题,应该是whether names should be divided into.顺序和动词形态错了.
还有,Some people hold the opinion that a good name deserves everything.这里,deserve是不是有问题呢?deserve的意思是“应得”,在这里显得很变扭,我觉得应该改成means everything可能更好,不是吗?
后面的influence要加s
wealthy拼错了,但是这里也不可以用wealthy,要有名词,去掉y——wealth.
后面的promotion prospects.不知道你想表达什么,“提升空间”?两个名词在一起,又不是专有名词,复合名词,这样用是不对的.前面那个必须形容词化.
,only with a good name can our not enlarge our konwledge and develop our character.有问题,应该是only with a good name ,can we not only enlarge our knowledge but develop our characters.
there shouldn’t be a distinction between good names or bad names中,or要改成and
最后那个despair也有问题,用错了是吧?这个是绝望的意思,你想表达消失是吧?应该用disappear
就这些了吧,我只能纠正到这个程度了.那个,给你个建议,六级作文,单词真的很重要,不要动不动就拼错,老师是非常鄙视单词都拼错的学生的.他们会认为你基础非常差,哪怕句式很花哨都没用,不会给你分的.这点很重要,希望你注意.
希望对你有帮助~~~
"While with the passage of time",这句话也有问题,表示“随着时光流逝”可以这样表达——As time goes by
还有, whether should name divide into good or bad?有问题,应该是whether names should be divided into.顺序和动词形态错了.
还有,Some people hold the opinion that a good name deserves everything.这里,deserve是不是有问题呢?deserve的意思是“应得”,在这里显得很变扭,我觉得应该改成means everything可能更好,不是吗?
后面的influence要加s
wealthy拼错了,但是这里也不可以用wealthy,要有名词,去掉y——wealth.
后面的promotion prospects.不知道你想表达什么,“提升空间”?两个名词在一起,又不是专有名词,复合名词,这样用是不对的.前面那个必须形容词化.
,only with a good name can our not enlarge our konwledge and develop our character.有问题,应该是only with a good name ,can we not only enlarge our knowledge but develop our characters.
there shouldn’t be a distinction between good names or bad names中,or要改成and
最后那个despair也有问题,用错了是吧?这个是绝望的意思,你想表达消失是吧?应该用disappear
就这些了吧,我只能纠正到这个程度了.那个,给你个建议,六级作文,单词真的很重要,不要动不动就拼错,老师是非常鄙视单词都拼错的学生的.他们会认为你基础非常差,哪怕句式很花哨都没用,不会给你分的.这点很重要,希望你注意.
希望对你有帮助~~~