作业帮我这个写对着吗 英语作文 感觉流水账
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我这个写对着吗 英语作文 感觉流水账
I think most people like travel because they can feel the beauty of the nature and breathe the fresh air at the same time what's more they can make friends I also like to travel because can make people relax enjoy the beautiful of the nature scenery let us magic of the nature
I think most people like travel because they can feel the beauty of the nature and breathe the fresh air at the same time what's more they can make friends I also like to travel because can make people relax enjoy the beautiful of the nature scenery let us magic of the nature
每处的细节描写太少了,而且语法上有错误.
像这种at the same time what's more我觉得不能连着用,显得很多余.要不就分成两句话来写.
还有就是太重复,一开头说了the beauty of nature（不用在nature前再加the了）后面又说了,nature这个词出现频率太高了……有点词穷的感觉.
而且……语法真的是很怪很怪……
像这种at the same time what's more我觉得不能连着用,显得很多余.要不就分成两句话来写.
还有就是太重复,一开头说了the beauty of nature（不用在nature前再加the了）后面又说了,nature这个词出现频率太高了……有点词穷的感觉.
而且……语法真的是很怪很怪……