英语月考作文,求批改Dear li huaI'm glad to hear that you want to study

英语月考作文,求批改
Dear li hua
I'm glad to hear that you want to study abroad in your letter .my suggestions for you are as follows
First,it is necessary for you to speak English well.Speaking well will help you to get along with others easily.Second,you should adapt to environment quickly ,which make your life interesting and happy.third,keeping a hobby is necessary in our life .in my spare time .I often play sports,such as play football football、play tennis and so on .we think it not only make us fun but also is good to ourself.last but not least ,you should have duty tocountry .you can be a volunter heiping others.
作文语法很多错误 西王老师修改

 作者句法不错,但是文章整体句子稍微偏短；行文稍显不流畅,应增加文中衔接词的使用；文中词汇表达较灵活丰富,不过请检查文章的单词拼写；请注意分段. .1 Dear li hua I'm glad to hear that you want to study abroad in your letter . [教师点评] [标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[学习提示] 易混词汇: happy, glad, cheerful, joyful, merry, delightful, gay, pleasant, nice, jolly, agreeable 均含“愉快的,高兴的”之意.   happy: 侧重感到满足、幸福或高兴.
glad: 最普通用词,语气较弱,表示礼貌的惯用语.指乐于做某事或因某事而感到满足,常表愉快的心情.
cheerful: 多指因内心的愉快而表现出兴高采烈,是强调而自然的感情流露.
joyful: 语气较强,强调心情或感情上的欣喜.
merry: 指精神情绪的暂时高涨,表示欢乐、愉快的心境或情景,侧重充满欢笑声和乐趣.
delightful: 指能带来强烈的快乐,激起愉快的情感,用于非常愉快的场合.
gay: 侧重无忧无虑、精神昂扬、充满生命的快乐.
pleasant: 侧重给人以“赏心悦目”或“愉快的,宜人的”感受.
nice: 语气较温和,泛指任何愉快或满意的感觉.
jolly: 通俗用词,多指充满快乐与喜悦的神情.
agreeable: 指与感受者的愿望、情趣或受好等和谐一致而带来的心情上的快意.[批改提示] want的近义表达有intend,tend,lack,need.1.2my suggestions for you are as follows First, it is necessary for you to speak English well. [教师点评] [句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写[学习提示] 易混词汇: indispensable, essential, necessary, requisite 均有“必不可少的,必需的”之意.   indispensable: 语气强,侧重指绝对必要性或不可缺少性.
essential: 指对事物本身性质具有决定性的重要性,暗含不可缺少,否则便无法存在.
necessary: 最常用词,侧重由客观因素决定的某种需要,强调不可避免,但并非绝不可缺少.
requisite: 正式用词,特指为实现某一目的或得到某种结果而应有的需要,有时可与necessary换用.1.3Speaking well will help you to get along with others easily. [教师点评] [批改提示] help近义表达有support/ assist/ aid 1.4Second, you should adapt to environment quickly , which make your life interesting and happy. [教师点评] [标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[学习提示] 易混词汇: adapt, adjust, conform, accommodate, suit, fit 均有“使适合,适应”之意.   adapt: 指人或物在原有情况下作某些改变以适应新的环境或不同的条件,强调改变的目的和重要性.
adjust: 与adapt含义很接近,但adjust所改变的幅度要小一些,侧重过程,主要用于调整角度、高度、光点等.
conform: 多指与某模式或规则相符,也引申指改变习惯等以适应新的环境.
accommodate: 书面用词,指以外部条件标准改变自己或某事以求得适应,着重改变或调节的有利.
suit: 指适合要求,从而使人满意愉快.
fit: 含义广,指人或物适合或适应某一目的或用途.[批改提示] 查看interesting与interested的区别.1.5third, keeping a hobby is necessary in our life . [教师点评] [低频警示] keep...hobby 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语 [标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写[学习提示] 易混词汇: indispensable, essential, necessary, requisite 均有“必不可少的,必需的”之意.   indispensable: 语气强,侧重指绝对必要性或不可缺少性.
essential: 指对事物本身性质具有决定性的重要性,暗含不可缺少,否则便无法存在.
necessary: 最常用词,侧重由客观因素决定的某种需要,强调不可避免,但并非绝不可缺少.
requisite: 正式用词,特指为实现某一目的或得到某种结果而应有的需要,有时可与necessary换用.[批改提示] keep近义表达有hold/ maintain/ preserve/ sustain 1.6in my spare time . [教师点评] [标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查![教师点评] 句子错误,in是介词,不能单独成句.1.7I often play sports, such as play football football. [教师点评] [语法检查] 建议把 football football 改成 football (Repeated Word)[搭配统计] 动名搭配 play...sport 在教材中出现过 1602 次   SeeAlso: play play³⁰⁰,represent sport⁴²,play fun¹⁰ [学习提示] 易混词汇: athletics, sport, game 均有“体育运动”之意.   athletics: 集合名词,常指需要体力与技术的sports与games,特指跳高、跑等竞技项目.
sport: 含义比athletics广泛,指各种形式的体育运动,尤指户外的如游泳、钓鱼、划船、登山等运动.
game: 主要指决定胜负的游戏、比赛,通常有一定的规则,参加者必须遵守,如蓝球、足球等.也作“运动会”解.[批改提示] often的近义表达有frequently.1.8play tennis and so on . [教师点评] [标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[动词错误] 请检查句中谓语动词.[动词错误] 请检查句中谓语动词.[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写1.9we think it not only make us fun but also is good to ourself. [教师点评] [拼写错误] 拼写错误,建议将ourself改为ourselves.[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写[学习提示] 易混词汇: consider, think, believe, count, deem, reckon, regard 均含有“认为”之意.   consider: 指经过考虑和观察后得出的结论.
think: 普通用词,指按照自己的意见提出看法.
believe: 通常指根据一定的证据,经思考后而认为属实.
count: 指作出判断后而得出的看法等.
deem: 正式用词,常用于法律、文学,强调作判断而不是思考.
reckon: 指对人或事作全面“权衡”,把各方面意见考虑进去后得出结论.
regard: 侧重凭外表或表面现象作判断.多强调观点.[批改提示] 此句型用的太过频繁,建议改为sb. suppose/claim+从句.   此句型用的太过频繁,建议改为sb. suppose+从句或sb. claim +从句或sb. agree +从句或第一人称时替换为As far as I am concerned.1.10last but not least , you should have duty tocountry . [教师点评] [句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查[拼写错误] tocountry 拼写错误,可替换选项为：to country, to-country, country[学习提示] 易混词汇: duty, obligation, responsibility, function 都有“义务,职责”之意.   duty: 指按道德和法律的标准,一个人永远要尽的义务,强调自觉性.
obligation: 指道义上或法律上对他人的义务,强调强制性.也指因作出承诺而被迫履行的某种义务.
responsibility: 指任何义务、职责、责任或职务上所尽的本分,强调对他人的责任.
function: 指因职务或职业关系去履行某种职责.1.11you can be a volunter heiping others. [教师点评] [句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写[拼写错误] heiping 拼写错误,可替换选项为：heaping, hipping, hoping[拼写错误] volunter 拼写错误,可替换选项为：volunteer, volunteers, blunte