作业帮求几篇英语作文,病文加范文…
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求几篇英语作文,病文加范文…
三篇病文再附上范文,简短点更好
三篇病文再附上范文,简短点更好
1.【习作要求】
你是李斌,武汉第一中学初三学生,你的一位英国笔友Baker先生,想来北京旅游,请你去信介绍一下北京城,并要一些有关北京的邮票.请你给Baker先生写一封回信.写信时间是2010年10月1日.
要点：北京是我国的首都,也是世界上最大、最重要的城市之一.在这座现代化的城市里,有很多古老的名胜和许多美丽的公园,人们为了保护城市的环境,种了许多花草树木.如果你想来北京旅游最好在秋天来,因为秋天是北京最好的季节,既不会太冷也不太热.相信你一定会非常快乐.
要求：写一封100词左右的回信,不要逐条翻译.
【学生习作】
Junior Grade 3
No. 1 Middle School
Wuhan
October 1st,2010
Dear Mr. Baker,
I was so pleased to receive your letter and am writing to tell you something about Beijing.
Beijing is the capital of our country. It is one of the biggest and the most important city① in the world. In this modern city, there are a lots of② high buildings and beautiful parks. The roads are very wide and clean. People here have planted many trees so that they can keep the city clean. They also grow as many flowers as they can ③ make the capital more and more beautiful. There are a lot of great places of interest in Beijing, too, such as the Forbidden city.
There are a lot of great places of interest in Beijing. If you come,you’d better visit the Great Wall. It is so great that you can’t help admiring it. And don’t forget to taste Beijing Roast Duck because it’s one of the most delicious dishes in China. I think you can come in autumn because the best season in Beijing is autumn. It is neither too cold nor too hot. I know you like collecting stamps and I’ll send you some beautiful Chinese stamps about Beijing.
Yours,
Li Bin①one of…的名词应该是复数形式此处应用cities.
②lots of前不用冠词a.
③此处应用不定式to.make the capital… 作状语,因此不能省略不定式符号to.
【名师点评】
本习作格式正确,要点齐全,内容充实,表达条理清楚,若能注意语言的规范,定可写出更好的文章. 【习作要求】
假如你叫雨荷,是大连市一中初三的学生.你的一位美国笔友Lucy King来信向你询问你们学校的情况.Lucy的通信地址是：Middle School of New York 10038 USA.请你给Lucy写一封回信.
写信时间是2010年9月10日.
要点：
你校是一所历史悠久的老学校,有50年的历史,也是全省最大的学校之一.校园内干净整洁,花草树木随处可见.学校有4座教学楼,二座实验楼,二座学生宿舍楼,还设有计算机室和图书馆,还在修建一个现代化的体育馆.学生有约5000人,大都来自农村,学习很努力.全校共有教职工约400多人,教师们教学经验丰富,认真负责,热爱学生.
提示：注意英语书信的格式,信的正文要包括所有内容要点,但不要逐条译成英语.
要求：写一篇120—150左右单词的回信.
2. 【学生习作】
Junior Grade 3
No. 1 Middle School
Dalian
September 10th,2010
Dear Lucy,
Thank you for your letter. You asked me tell ① you something about my school. OK. Now let me to ② make a brief introduction to you.
My school is an old one with a long history of 50 years. And it is one of the biggest middle schools in our province. Its ③ kept clean and tidy. You can see many beautiful flowers and tall trees everywhere. There have ④ four classroom buildings, two lab buildings, two students’ dorms and a big library. We have computer rooms. And a modern gym is be⑤ built there. There are about four thousands ⑥ students in our school. Most of them are from the countryside. They study very good ⑦. More than four hundred teachers are working here. They are good at teaching. And they love their students. They do their best to help the students. I like my school very much.
Best wishes.
Yours ever,
Yu He①to tell,“请某人做某事”应该说“ask sb. to do sth.”.
②let后的动词不带“to”.
③It’s,此处是被动语态,缺助动词be.
④are,表示某地有某物,应为“There be”.此处应用其复数形式There are.
⑤现在进行时的被动语态形式是：is being built.
⑥thousand,此处不应用复数形式.
⑦good是形容词,不能修饰动词.应改用副词well.
【名师点评】
本文格式规范,要点齐备,有条有理,若能稍加留意语法,将有长足的进步. 3. 【学生习作】
My Lost Book Last week, I borrowed a book from the school library. It was very interesting. But I have lost① it three days ago. I felt very worried. I have looked for it everywhere, but I didn’t find② it. I also asked a lot of people if they saw③ the book, but they all said no. I thought I will pay for it. Yesterday Tom came to see me and told me he found a book. Then he took it out and gave it to me. I was very happy because it was my library’s book. I thanked Tom very much. And then I returned it back to the school library at once. ①ago用于一般过去时态, 故改为lost.
②为了与前句保持一致,此处用现在完成时更好.故改为have found.
③根据句意用过去完成时态had seen更好.
与主句保持一致, 应改为would.
改为showed, 句意表达更贴切.
give back或return都有“归还”之意.故改为gave.
【名师点评】
本篇习作者能够按照借书---丢书---找书---还书的线索去写,思路清晰,内容连贯,结构严谨,是一篇较好的范文.不足之处是时态掌握不够好,也有用词错误.望多强基本功训练,尽量在写作中少犯或不犯错误. 采纳 谢谢
你是李斌,武汉第一中学初三学生,你的一位英国笔友Baker先生,想来北京旅游,请你去信介绍一下北京城,并要一些有关北京的邮票.请你给Baker先生写一封回信.写信时间是2010年10月1日.
要点：北京是我国的首都,也是世界上最大、最重要的城市之一.在这座现代化的城市里,有很多古老的名胜和许多美丽的公园,人们为了保护城市的环境,种了许多花草树木.如果你想来北京旅游最好在秋天来,因为秋天是北京最好的季节,既不会太冷也不太热.相信你一定会非常快乐.
要求：写一封100词左右的回信,不要逐条翻译.
【学生习作】
Junior Grade 3
No. 1 Middle School
Wuhan
October 1st,2010
Dear Mr. Baker,
I was so pleased to receive your letter and am writing to tell you something about Beijing.
Beijing is the capital of our country. It is one of the biggest and the most important city① in the world. In this modern city, there are a lots of② high buildings and beautiful parks. The roads are very wide and clean. People here have planted many trees so that they can keep the city clean. They also grow as many flowers as they can ③ make the capital more and more beautiful. There are a lot of great places of interest in Beijing, too, such as the Forbidden city.
There are a lot of great places of interest in Beijing. If you come,you’d better visit the Great Wall. It is so great that you can’t help admiring it. And don’t forget to taste Beijing Roast Duck because it’s one of the most delicious dishes in China. I think you can come in autumn because the best season in Beijing is autumn. It is neither too cold nor too hot. I know you like collecting stamps and I’ll send you some beautiful Chinese stamps about Beijing.
Yours,
Li Bin①one of…的名词应该是复数形式此处应用cities.
②lots of前不用冠词a.
③此处应用不定式to.make the capital… 作状语,因此不能省略不定式符号to.
【名师点评】
本习作格式正确,要点齐全,内容充实,表达条理清楚,若能注意语言的规范,定可写出更好的文章. 【习作要求】
假如你叫雨荷,是大连市一中初三的学生.你的一位美国笔友Lucy King来信向你询问你们学校的情况.Lucy的通信地址是：Middle School of New York 10038 USA.请你给Lucy写一封回信.
写信时间是2010年9月10日.
要点：
你校是一所历史悠久的老学校,有50年的历史,也是全省最大的学校之一.校园内干净整洁,花草树木随处可见.学校有4座教学楼,二座实验楼,二座学生宿舍楼,还设有计算机室和图书馆,还在修建一个现代化的体育馆.学生有约5000人,大都来自农村,学习很努力.全校共有教职工约400多人,教师们教学经验丰富,认真负责,热爱学生.
提示：注意英语书信的格式,信的正文要包括所有内容要点,但不要逐条译成英语.
要求：写一篇120—150左右单词的回信.
2. 【学生习作】
Junior Grade 3
No. 1 Middle School
Dalian
September 10th,2010
Dear Lucy,
Thank you for your letter. You asked me tell ① you something about my school. OK. Now let me to ② make a brief introduction to you.
My school is an old one with a long history of 50 years. And it is one of the biggest middle schools in our province. Its ③ kept clean and tidy. You can see many beautiful flowers and tall trees everywhere. There have ④ four classroom buildings, two lab buildings, two students’ dorms and a big library. We have computer rooms. And a modern gym is be⑤ built there. There are about four thousands ⑥ students in our school. Most of them are from the countryside. They study very good ⑦. More than four hundred teachers are working here. They are good at teaching. And they love their students. They do their best to help the students. I like my school very much.
Best wishes.
Yours ever,
Yu He①to tell,“请某人做某事”应该说“ask sb. to do sth.”.
②let后的动词不带“to”.
③It’s,此处是被动语态,缺助动词be.
④are,表示某地有某物,应为“There be”.此处应用其复数形式There are.
⑤现在进行时的被动语态形式是：is being built.
⑥thousand,此处不应用复数形式.
⑦good是形容词,不能修饰动词.应改用副词well.
【名师点评】
本文格式规范,要点齐备,有条有理,若能稍加留意语法,将有长足的进步. 3. 【学生习作】
My Lost Book Last week, I borrowed a book from the school library. It was very interesting. But I have lost① it three days ago. I felt very worried. I have looked for it everywhere, but I didn’t find② it. I also asked a lot of people if they saw③ the book, but they all said no. I thought I will pay for it. Yesterday Tom came to see me and told me he found a book. Then he took it out and gave it to me. I was very happy because it was my library’s book. I thanked Tom very much. And then I returned it back to the school library at once. ①ago用于一般过去时态, 故改为lost.
②为了与前句保持一致,此处用现在完成时更好.故改为have found.
③根据句意用过去完成时态had seen更好.
与主句保持一致, 应改为would.
改为showed, 句意表达更贴切.
give back或return都有“归还”之意.故改为gave.
【名师点评】
本篇习作者能够按照借书---丢书---找书---还书的线索去写,思路清晰,内容连贯,结构严谨,是一篇较好的范文.不足之处是时态掌握不够好,也有用词错误.望多强基本功训练,尽量在写作中少犯或不犯错误. 采纳 谢谢